Cpt. Smurf

JK Rowling's the best, obviously!! The way she's got most of the world waiting for the last book means she must be doing something right! Once you've started reading her ...

If I'm actually writing the story it's the computer, but for jotting down ideas and things that just pop into my head it's a pen and notepad

Well, I think it's easiest to at least wait until you have the plot, and get the title somewhere from there. You could use the name of a place in ...

As a prologue, I think this is quite good. I'm not entirely sure about the opening sentence, though, as it seems to have nothing to do with the rest of ...

Wow, thanks for the comments! I'm gonna edit right away! Well, I hadn't originally planned this as a prologue, more of a one-off thing really, but now maybe I will ...

Hmm, tricky. Hero - Anyone who knows me would assume that I would go for Harry Potter, but he tends to get a bit annoying with his mood swings. I ...

I very rarely look anywhere but the fantasy section, and i'm glad i did this time. Normally i would have gotten tire of reading that much (im impatient!) long ago, ...

I thought this was good, very readable, which i think counts for a lot: if there's one flaw that books like LOTR and His Dark Materials have, it's that they ...

Well, I've decided to take a break from "The Outlands" and embark on a new journey of literary endeavours (lol!). While listening to The Black Parade by My Chemical Romance, ...

I have to say I was a little confused by this. We have: An elf, a dwarf, someone called Nigel and someone called Alden. I couldn't tell who was who ...

Sounds like it could be good, tell us when something happens!!

Hi, and welcome to YWS! There's no need to apologise, you're here to improve! The general plot of this was promising, but it needs to be edited a huge amount ...

The reason for that would be 'sort of' explained later on in the book. At least, the reader would know why, but they wouldn't. :? Not making myself very clear, ...

I agree with Jesseble - I thought the beginning was great. It got my interest straight away. The plotline was a bit weird, but we all love a weird story! ...

Wow, that really was good. Normally something like this wouldn't interest me, but I found it quite gripping. I didn't find the descriptions a problem at all, and although the ...